Original

          The first impression I had as I stopped in the doorway of the immense City Room was of extreme rush and bustle, with reporters moving rapidly back and forth in the long aisles in order to shove their copy at each other, or making frantic gestures as they shouted into their many telephones.

Revision

          I stopped by the doorway. The City Room was immense, reporters rushing down the aisles, shoving copy at each other, bustling back again, flinging gestures, shouting into telephones.